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Melody of my heart

Why am I the soul of pain?
And lost my way inside of you
Why is it going to me
Promising it's the last time by twos

Is it a dream? shadow it's me
And I must learn to live with my misery
Maybe not this way, feeling surreal
This is my pain and agony

Deeper again
Voices in my head
Like nail in my heart
And stone in my hands

Is it a dream? shadow it's me
And i must learn to live with my misery
Maybe not this way, feeling surreal
This is my pain and agony

Every breath tears my lungs
Every day makes next scars
Still hear the voices singing one melody
Melody of my heart with one word "die"